Would you turn Vaughn's first page? Be tough. Comments help the writer.

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  • deanna - 14 years ago

    I think the writer was wanting to dangle a carrot, so to speak, in order to drum up some intensity. However, there just wasn’t enough clear information given. Also, as much as I’d like to think of myself as an adult, I giggled when I read ejaculated. But all is not lost. I read some promise in those vague words. Just rewrite, rewrite, rewrite! Then do it again!

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