1) Opening with a dream is so overdone that I wouldn't have read any firther. 2) There's some over-writing. For instance, "She splashed cold water onto her face" is better paced than "She ran cool water from the tap into her cupped palms and splashed it onto her face."
1) Opening with a dream is so overdone that I wouldn't have read any firther. 2) There's some over-writing. For instance, "She splashed cold water onto her face" is better paced than "She ran cool water from the tap into her cupped palms and splashed it onto her face."