A headache and a need to pee aren't page-turners. I didn't like parts of the writing: "The red letters of the Quik Stop sign reflected onto the hood of the minivan"...shouldn't the sign be reflecting OFF the hood?...I scanned aimlessly through the channels on the radio while my mom finished up inside of the mini mart, wondering what was taking her so long...the narrator is obviously the one wondering, but it reads as if the mom is wondering.
A headache and a need to pee aren't page-turners. I didn't like parts of the writing: "The red letters of the Quik Stop sign reflected onto the hood of the minivan"...shouldn't the sign be reflecting OFF the hood?...I scanned aimlessly through the channels on the radio while my mom finished up inside of the mini mart, wondering what was taking her so long...the narrator is obviously the one wondering, but it reads as if the mom is wondering.