Yes. Nice writing style with good dialogue. Good job of showing that this is a different world through the skin colors. Most people overdo it and get into backstory too soon. The swords promised action to come fairly quickly. Well done.
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Yes. Nice writing style with good dialogue. Good job of showing that this is a different world through the skin colors. Most people overdo it and get into backstory too soon. The swords promised action to come fairly quickly. Well done.