No. I liked the first sentence. It never hurts to start with the name of the POV character. I've noticed that Preston/Childs (Relic and a bunch of other books) do this frequently. Unfortunately, the missing HADs took me right out of it, and the rest was just description and backstory.
No. I liked the first sentence. It never hurts to start with the name of the POV character. I've noticed that Preston/Childs (Relic and a bunch of other books) do this frequently. Unfortunately, the missing HADs took me right out of it, and the rest was just description and backstory.