Would you turn Jess's page? Be tough. Share insights with a comment.

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  • Jean - 15 years ago

    I love, love when stories start like this. The next page starts where you know a lot has happened. It adds and clues me in that this might be a fast moving story. Great 1st page!

  • susan - 15 years ago

    Truly a great voice and attention paid to getting a reader's attention without info dump. Got tension set up immediately and with a concise form. Nice work.

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